Tuesday 14 February 2017

Wordbound February 8 Prompt: The Porcelain Sisters

Prompt: Something gets broken beyond repair

In an antique stop off Beach Street lived two porcelain dolls, the sisters Christina and Adele. They sat in the window overlooking the street, watching as little girls pointed and stared, asking their mothers to purchase them. But always, the mothers shook their heads and pushed the girls along. And so for years, the sister dolls stared out the windows at little girls and mothers, in an old antique stop off Beach Street.

The night however, was a different story.

“Christina, wake up,” Adele whispered as the candles were extinguished and the shop door closed. “The old man’s gone. It’s time for some fun.”

Christina blinked and turned to her sister, a smile forming on her face.

“Will today be the day you approach the wooden soldiers?” she asked slyly. Adele blushed, as much as a porcelain doll could.

“That’s not what I meant,” she said angrily. “I meant we should go visit the bears again.”

“I don’t know if they’ll let us play with their children again,” Christina said. “Not after what happened last time.”

“Doesn’t hurt to try. Let’s go!” Before Christina could protest, Adele was already climbing down the shelves in the window to the shop floor.

“Wait for me!” Adele scrambled after her sister and followed her to the counter, where a cottage stood behind protective glass. There were two large porcelain bears, looking on as their three cubs danced and played with each other. Upon seeing the sisters however, they came forward in defense.

“Not again sisters,” the mother bear said, grabbing one of her cubs and placing him behind her. “You nearly broke our children last time with your mischievousness.”

“But they didn’t break,” Adele replied. “Anyways, that slide’s been sold. We just wanted to play with them right here. You can watch us if you want.”

“I think that might be all right,” the father bear said, looking towards the mother bear. She shook her head.

“No, I can’t risk it,” she said. “You’ll have to find some other figurines to play with and get into trouble.”

“Please mom?” one of the cubs asked, rising up on her hind legs. “I like playing with Adele and Christina.”

“My word is final,” her mother replied. Looking upset, the bears turned to their father.

“Listen to your mother children,” he said. Adele and Christina walked away amidst protests from the bear cubs.

“Told you they wouldn’t let us play with them,” Christina said.

“Shut it,” Adele answered looking cross. “Do you think anyone else will want to play, or will those bears spread rumors about us?”

“Well there is that dog that came in a few days ago,” Christina replied. “We could see what he’s up to.”

“I suppose, though I prefer cats.” The sisters giggled and made their way towards another counter. Before they had reached it however, a strange noise made them stop.

“What was that?” Christina asked, sounding frightened.

“It came from the door,” Adele said, pointing towards the shop entrance. “Do you think the old man has come back?”

“If it was him, he would have come in already,” Christina said. The noise came again, a creaking sound and the door shuddered.

“Hide!” Adele grabbed her sister and they ducked behind a broom that was hidden in a corner. With a bang, the door burst open. A man stood there, and it wasn’t anyone the sisters recognized. He was dressed in black and carried a large sack. He walked into the shop and looked around. Spotting one of the counters, he walked towards it and stooped down. The sisters saw a grin spread on his face. He reached forward and smashed the glass. They winced at the noise.

“He’s taking the bears!” Adele whispered as the man began to place the bears gingerly into his sack. “We have to stop him!”

“Adele, don’t!” Christina reached to grab her sister’s arm, pulling her back. “The humans can’t know about us!”

“I don’t care, he’s taking our friends!” Adele wrenched herself free and ran towards the counter, climbing up to the top. Christina followed her, making sure the man wasn’t looking in their direction. As she climbed to the top of the counter, she gasped as Adele leaped onto the man’s arm and climbed up.

“What the hell?” The man looked down at the porcelain doll scaling his arm, then cried out as it grabbed his nose.

“Put them back!” Adele cried, squeezing the man’s nose as hard as she could. “Put back the bears! They’re our friends!”

“Get off me!” The man reached up and yanked Adele away. The doll struggled in his grasp. The man stared at the doll for a moment, then lifted her up and threw her towards the ground.

“Adele!” Christina watched in horror as her sister plummeted to the ground. With a loud smash, she broke into a hundred pieces. Christina broke into sobs, falling to her knees. The noise caught the attention of the thief, who walked towards the other porcelain doll.

“Huh,” he said. “There was two of them. Too bad. I could have made a lot of money.” Shrugging, he grabbed the sobbing doll and hurled her towards the ground to join her sister. Looking up, he spotted the register and headed towards it.

The next morning, the old man who owned the shop walked in to see the carnage the thief had caused the night before. He walked towards the empty register and felt a crunch beneath his foot. Looking down, he saw the smashed porcelain and immediately looked towards the window where there was a gap in figurines. Sighing, he got the broom and dustpan and began to sweep the pieces up, knowing the sisters were broken beyond repair.


There is an antique store off Beach Street, where two porcelain dolls once lived. Girls pass by the shop and sigh with disappointment, telling their mothers that the dolls must have been sold. Time passes by, and still the shopkeeper has not filled the space where the sisters once stood.

Saturday 4 February 2017

Wordbound Wednesday, February 1

What is something you're embarrassed to admit you're written?

Okay, so in my defense, I've since rewritten the story, but I had no idea that it was as bad as it was until I looked at it again over ten years later.

So when I was 15, my imagination was running wild. I loved Lord of the Rings, had a knack for fanfiction, and was writing unfinished stories based on dreams that I had been having. I was also in an English class that was more advanced than the two AP classes I would be taking in the next two years. There was a lot of analysis and writing in that class. Finally, we got an assignment that I was happy to write. Creative Writing! I was so excited to come up with a great original idea and then write it down! Unfortunately there was a drawback. I had to complete diagrams, follow rules, and use these assigned $10 words throughout my story. I had to highlight them as well. I'm thinking, are you kidding me?! This was my time to shine! I want to write this my way! But whatever, I made it work and set to work writing a story about a prophecy telling of a girl who could control the four elements in order to return something called the Diamond Staff that was presented by God, helped by a dragon, a sorceress, and an elf. Being the good Catholic girl that I was and on my way to being confirmed, it was HEAVILY influenced by religion. But I did well, got my A, and moved on.

Flash forward to last September when I decided to do my personal occupation presentation on NaNoWriMo and my love of writing. I decided that, in a spur of the moment insanity, that I would take the story I had written so long ago and rewrite it. So I found my portfolio with all of my English assignments in it and took a look at the story.

Oh. Dear. God. In, Heaven.

It's bad. Super bad. The ULTIMATE bad. How did I write this and get an A?!?!?! Naturally, I got to work and the rewrite was so much better. Took out the religion aspect and did what I wanted to do. I have to say it's much better than the original. But ugh, it's so embarrassing! Here's some extra special lines.

"Her hair was pure blonde and her skin was of fresh milk. She was a sight indeed." *gag* Someone recently watched The Addams Family Values.

"But it can't be me, I'm just an orphan street rat." And you can call me Aladdin...make it stop please.

"The Lord will provide Nichalia," said Christana. "You may have forgotten, but wizards have also been known to be blessed by God, and I have been known to give a few prophecies myself." Yes, just slam that Catholic influence in there why don't you?

Oh and there's that time the "pure soul", whatever that is, transformed into an angel and killed the antagonist for them, and then showed up at the end "shining more brightly than ever". Good God, I want to throw up.

"It was the best of times, it was the best of times." I'm now dead from embarrassment and writing this from my grave.

There's no way I'm rewriting the entire transcript for here, since my fingers might dissolve into shame, but I reiterate, HOW DID I GET AN A ON THIS?!?! I still can't believe that I put this out there and thought that it was good. I'm thankful now that I'm older, wiser, and know how to at least write decently. Now if you'll excuse me, I need to go hide this story from the world forever.

P.S. If anyone was wondering, I did really well on the rewrite and my presentation, and got a lot of compliments from my classmates. Plus gained an amazingly talented friend from my class who has given me more writing music. Score!